主题：帮朋友改的一份 Cover Letter. 也请大家多提 -- 煮酒正熟

基本上最重要的几点你和楼下的朋友都已经说了。Cover letter的目的是要highlight简历里的一部份（不是全部）内容来引起hiring manager的注意，所以cover letter的要求是：

1、不能太长，否则直接去读resume就是了

2、必须有针对性，highlight的内容一定要和job posting里的要求符合，如果申请的工作和现在的工作不一样的话这点尤其重要。所以resume可以一稿多投，cover letter几乎不可能。

3、用词（包括语气和技术细节）一定要简单易懂，因为读cover letter的一般都是HR或head hunter，他们对你的专业很可能不熟，所以一些关键词或内容的说法和job posting越接近越好。

4、就像你说的，能量化的东西一定要量化。如果job posting要求三年的工作经验，cover letter里面一定要说清楚你在有关领域做了几年。这类信息不一定能从resume里看出来。

5、语气要professional。你朋友的原信太口语化，改过后的好多了。还有称呼最好不要用first name。和recruiter熟了以后可以再改。

6、Cover letter还可以用来说一些不能放在resume里面的话，如要求保密、和最方便你联系的时候、解释resume里的空档（如果有一段时间即没工作也不在学校里），等等。

我用你的几个关键词在网上找了一下，找到了一个比较接近的job posting（包括联系人Martin都对上了）：Software Development Team Leader - Embedded System

就当这是你的朋友要申请的位子吧。这个position看上去比较technical，所以不需要太多的business经历或业绩，我觉得可以这么写（没有看过你朋友的resume，这只能做个例子）

Dear Mr. Sharman:

I came across your job posting for a Software Development Team Leader - Embedded Systems position in Brisbane, and I am very interested in this position.

I have had more than eight years of experience as a software developer, technical director and R&D manager. I have used C/C++ to develop software used in a wide range of applications, such as audio/visual processing in digital cameras and baby monitors. I have also managed teams of up to XXX engineers, planned and coordinated each team member's work on a daily basis, and drove issue-resolution efforts to ensure that our team would deliver quality work products under sometimes severe time constraints...＜可能还要加几句其他的经验以符合job posting里的各种要求＞ The applications my team have developed were often critical to the success of the final products, I am very proud of the quality of the work products which my team has delivered.

Because of the successes I have achieved in my career, I believe that I am a very strong candidate for this position. My resume is attached my resume for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely,

XXXXXX