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要是吹毛求疵crafting,这一段可能有点小问题。
With four years of experience as an R&D manager and director in XXX industry, I have lead a team to launch eight products to the market and increased revenue by 15% on a yearly basis. I believe my proven track record of success combined with an updated technical skill set would make me a strong candidate for the position.
1. with four years of experience，指用experience来干什么，拉队伍研发8个新产品是利用自己已经有的four years of experience，还是过去四年里我带队研发8个新产品，获取了experience? 如果是后者，不妨试一试下面这句，不过我个人觉得有点太文绉绉了。
Being an R&D manager and director in XXX industry for four years, I have led a team to launch eight products to the market...
2.increase 和谁并列？这是你朋友发出的动作（那是和led并列）还是他领导的小组发出的动作（launch）？不过这是小问题，一看大家都明白。
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🙂我来试一试：几个小问题 2 青牛甲 字585 2009-03-31 07:01:13
🙂兄弟的建议很好。感谢 煮酒正熟 字133 2009-03-31 17:58:03
🙂我跳出来说两句 3 坐看风起云涌时 字343 2009-03-30 21:37:56
🙂多谢老寞 煮酒正熟 字91 2009-03-31 18:00:23
