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except that this part reads a bit confusing:
Two days ago, her brother was helping some people who were hit by a bomb shell, when another one fell at the same location. He was brought here. His sister was the only relative he had left here. Their parents died and their only brother was shot dead in the head about a month ago. His body was maimed by about a hundred of tiny mortar ricochets. I could easily figure out why she was looking for me. She needed me to give him a painkiller injection, for I had a training at the medical center in our town a few years ago.
It appears that "the wife of my brother in law" had two brothers, one wounded while helping others and the other, shot dead a while ago. The sentence "His body was maimed by about a hundred of tiny mortar ricochets." presumably refers to the wounded, given the word "maim", but it would be clearer if you refer to the characters by names, e.g.,
That was Abby, the wife of my brother in law.
... her brother, John, was helping some people...
John was brought here, as Abby was the only relative he had left here.
John was maimed by hundreds of tiny mortar ricochets.
etc.
Just my two cents. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing.
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🙂谢谢 夏至欧锦 字44 2014-10-16 05:02:27
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